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Editorial comments on the Abstract (page 1)
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                 Key: MQTT-100
                 URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/MQTT-100
             Project: OASIS Message Queuing Telemetry Transport (MQTT) TC
          Issue Type: Improvement
          Components: edits
            Reporter: Peter Niblett
            Priority: Minor


1. line 22 These sentence  "These characteristics make it ideal for use in constrained environments, for example, but not limited to:" reads awkwardly.  How about a splitting it into two, , "These characteristics make it ideal for use in constrained environments,. These include environments:

2. Line 24 uses the word "unreliable". When writing the charter we tried to avoid that word, as it has negative connotations if you are a telco.  Actiually the charter provides the following overall summary..

"Providing a lightweight publish/subscribe reliable messaging transport protocol suitable for communication in M2M/IoT contexts where a small code footprint is required and/or network bandwidth is at a premium." which we could use somewhere on this page.

3. Line 29.  Add words "The use of" at the start

4. Line 32 explicitly mentions TCP/IP.  

5. Line 35.  This refers to QoS 0 as  "At most once" but then goes on to say that Duplication can occur... This is actually a wider issue as this wording appears elsewhere in the spec

6. Line 43.  I suggest deleting the words  "using the Last Will and Testament feature" , since we don't use this term anywhere else.




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