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Issue 33 - Opening phrases for Customer Management Framework and Benefits Realisation Strategy - open

From: Peter Brown
To: [email protected]
Date: Tue, 01 Mar 2011 01:24:00 -0000

Chris: Would you take a look at a few suitable phrases for the beginning of the sections on Customer Management Framework (lines 389-91) and the Benefits Realisation Strategy (460-62) as per John’s issue? Cheers, Peter From: John Borras [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: Saturday, 26 February, 2011 02:17 To: [email protected] Subject: [tgf] NEW ISSUES - WORKING DRAFT 01 Peter Here are my comments on draft 01: Abstract after 1st para - Move lines 7-9 to this point as it’s imperative to state right up front th at the Primer is a transient document, ie work in progress, from which future Standards and Committee Notes will be derived. Line 140 – expand in full the 2 acronyms for those who do not know them Line 317 – does the TC agree with the change from “will” to “preference”? Lines 389-391 - need to add a few words of explanation at this point to each of these entries General - line 413 – this whole section needs a thorough review and endorsement by the TC as it is new. Lines 460-462 - need to add a few words of explanation at this point to each of these entries General - line 476 - should this sub-section be in Part 3 as it's Explanatory rather than Standards material? Line 1201 – there is no Appendix D, needs new cross-reference. John