Short descrption, 2nd review

I spent a couple of hours reviewing the latest draft. I didn't finish, but I have attached what I have done so far.

While the paper has improved, I don't believe that it is ready to publish. It still contains technical inaccuracies, and I am concerned that our audience will find it unclear in places. The DITA source markup also needs some refactoring.

Regards,
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Bob Thomas
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