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Last minute changes Re: [emergency-cap] Groups - etl-v1.0-cn01-wd03.docx uploaded
Hi All,

    
There was a
        previously missed item that I couldn't find: Line 252. I noted
        the changes I found immediate ly below my signature. I had to
        search  around the line numbers since they change between
        versions. 

      

    
I think we (Norm) need to come up with a
            solution for 

                  

    

                  

    
Section
                    3.4 – Spectrum = Infectious Disease / Action… seems
                    like it should be retitled if we voted down
                    Infectious Disease. we can also use
            "disease", "disease outbreak" and "contagious disease". I
            vote for "contagious disease".

    

              

    
I want to upload this
                asap, so if I don't hear back on this in an hour or so,
                I'll upload with the note that we have a couple of
                changes we need to decide on. 

              

    

              

    
Please get back to me
                soon since we're going for a ballot over the weekend. We
                can still change to Monday if we absolutely must

    
.

              

    
Cheers,

                Rex

              

    

              

    
    
    
There are a
          few things, like extra spaces in text, that are in all copies
          and were just spotted now…

    
    
    
Line 44 'if'
          to 'of'

    
    
    
Line 46
          Extra space before "Consumers.."

    
    
    
Line 252 ?

    
    
    
Line 564
          Extra space between "cases" and "the" 

    
    
    
Line 720 Extra space
          between "were" and "designed"

    

        

    

      

    

    

      

    

      

    
 

    
On 10/7/2021 8:51 PM, Paulsen,Norm
      (ECCC) wrote:

    

    
      
      
      
      
      

        
Using
            the line numbers found in the wd03 document, here’s the
            list…

        
 

        
I
            can call you and show you these with a video call earlier
            before the 11 am meeting. I will log in at 9 am and check if
            and when you’d like to do that. We can use my Zoom.

        
 

        
Many
            of these you will be able to see right away from the listing
            below, but the yellow stuff will just be easier to show you.

        
 

        
Line
            156 -
           extra
            blank

        
Line
            189 – capital letter

        
Line
            288 – extra period

        
Line
            302 -  extra ‘s’ on the word ‘distribution’
          

        
Line
            312 - the snippet “for this element” is present in WD03, but
            had been removed in the re-write.

        
Line
            330 – missing comma

        
Line
            338 – “as broad or narrow” should be “is broad or narrow”

        
Lines
            343-352 – (section 3) 4 word tweaks not incorporated

        
Line
            354-407 – (section 3.1) 9 word tweaks and corrections not
            incorporated

        
Line
            417 – missing the word “anticipated”

        
Line
            468 – sentence ends with 4 periods

        
Line
            569 -
          capital
            letter

        
Line
            574 -
          capital
            letter

        
 

        
There
            are a few things, like extra spaces in text, that are in all
            copies and were just spotted now…

        
Line
            44 'if' to 'of'

        
Line
            46 Extra space before "Consumers.."

        
Line
            252 ?

        
Line
            564 Extra space between "cases" and "the" 

        
Line
            720 Extra
            space between "were" and "designed"

        
 

        
Images

        
Section
            3.2 - Spectrum = Fire / Time, not copied over from my draft
            to yours

        
Section
            3.3 – Spectrum = Fire / Urgency, not replaced from my draft
            to yours with… Spectrum Fire / Impact  

        
Section
            3.4 – Spectrum = Infectious Disease / Action… seems like it
            should be retitled if we voted down Infectious Disease.
            

        
 

        
OET-200
            in appendix B, should be “transport issue”

        
 

        
Appendix
            C missing this latest revision

        
 

        
Norm

        
 

        

          

            
From: Rex Brooks <>
                

                Sent: October 7, 2021 3:15 PM

                To: Paulsen,Norm (ECCC)
                <>

                Cc: Jacob Westfall <>;
                Elysa Jones <>

                Subject: Re: [emergency-cap] Groups -
                etl-v1.0-cn01-wd03.docx uploaded

          

        

        
 

        
Hi
            Norm, 

        
I
            hope it's not endless, but...

        
Please
            send them over tonight. It's unlikely I'll get to them since
            I've turned into a bit more of a sundowner in the last few
            years, and I'd rather not do these last changes tonight.
            However, if I have an idea of how many changes other than a
            revised Acknowledgements, I can adjust my schedule to
            accommodate this.

        
I've
            always been a morning person and my performance is better in
            those hours... So I'd rather be safe than sorry.

        
We
            may want to have a special SC meeting to get its approval of
            these changes so that we have it properly minuted. I would
            not be in favor of a "with pending changes" tacked onto the
            approval tomorrow.

        
A
            special meeting could be Monday anytime for me or Tuesday
            before the TC meeting.

        
Cheers,

            Rex

        

          
On 10/7/2021 11:17 AM, Paulsen,Norm
            (ECCC) wrote:

        

        
          
Rex..

          
 

          
I
              did a comparison and yes there are several misses to
              report….

          
 

          
For
              example…

          
1.     
              Section
              2, line 5, extra blank

          
2.     
              Section
              2, line 6, extra space and extra period.

          
3.     
              Section
              2.9, line 11, extra ‘s’ on the word ‘distribution’
            

          
4.     
              Section
              2.10, line 8, the snippet “for this element” is present in
              WD03, but had been removed in the re-write.

          
5.     
              Etc…

          
 

          
There
              are a number of these.
            

          
 

          
I
              can easily show them tomorrow, or do you want them fully
              listed like the above and sent over tonight. I could do
              that after 10pm tonight.

          
 

          
Norm

          
 

          
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              Subject: [emergency-cap] Groups -
              etl-v1.0-cn01-wd03.docx uploaded

          
 

          
Submitter's message

            This is a new Working Draft wd03. I've done my best, but we
            know there's always something a mere human will miss. Let's
            gather up any edits, changes and corrections so that with
            the addition of revised Acknowledgements, I can put together
            one more improved working draft for approval. It would be
            good if we could come close to wrapping up those last
            changes Friday 8 October 2021 for approval at next Tuesday's
            EMTC Meeting 12 October 2021 for the CAP Workshop and IAEM.

            

            Rex 

            -- Rex Brooks 

          
            
              

                
                  
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