This looks great! I think the first paragraph especially is well
written. I did have some minor editorial comments, that do not amount to
much, but I have included inline...
> LIST OF DELIVERABLES
What are the dates for these deliverables?
> Development of a core set of messages to support the National
> Incident Management System mandated in Homeland Security Presidential
> Directive #5
You should provide a link to HSPD-5
(http://www.whitehouse.gov/news/releases/2003/02/20030228-9.html)
> and based on established Incident Command System (ICS)
> formats.
Is there a link here that can be provided as well? Something that will
give those reading the charter something to reference in case they need
additional clarification?
> In the course of developing these deliverables, the Subcommittee will
> draw on the expertise of the GIS and Infrastructure Subcommittees.
Add "EM" in front of these subcommittees, as in EM GIS.
Eliot/Bill: have you guys finalized a name for the GIS SC? While I
mention "EM GIS" here, I am not sure it really captures what it is you
are doing.
Also, the "Infrastructure" SC name, which you will see when the minutes
of the f-2-f are sent, is now "EM Infrastructure Framework".
> In addition, the Subcommittee will make recommendations to the full
> Technical Committee
Add EM before "Technical Committee" here as well.
That's it. Looking forward to seeing this effort really get underway as
a new OASIS TC this week!
Allen
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R. Allen Wyke
Chair, Emergency Management TC
http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/emergency
