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Subject: [legalxml-courtfiling] Comments on Blue Requirements Draft




From: "Cusick, James" <>
To: <>,<>
Date: Mon, 11 Apr 2005 12:02:22 -0400






Title: [legalxml-courtfiling] Input on Blue Requirements Draft





Roger and team,
I have reviewed the latest verison of LegalXML System Blue Functional and Non 
Functional Requirements
Working Draft 08, 4 April 2005. I thought the 
document was in very good shape overall. I only found some minor things to 
mention, almost all of them grammatical. Nice job.
Regards,
james
 
158 - missing period
192 - missing period
236 - not a safe assumption 
that the CMS will calculate fees, could be anohter system or process
298 - 
awkward sentance, no object
300 - typo in "filing would a judge" should read 
"filing would be a judge"
562 - incomplete sentance "Requestor’s interaction 
with the system to retrieve data"
618 - typo "to accept a the request" should 
be "to accept [a or the] request"
619 - agreement problem "a request results" 
should be "a resust result"
713 - this may be just a style thing, but the 
following sentance bothers me "A Major Design Element (MDE) that prepares and 
submits filings to a court for review and receives the results of that process" 
as it does not have any active verb and as a result no object, seems like Word's 
grammar checker doesn't mind but I do, also it is missing a period.
745 - 
"other data  were recorded" should be "was recorded"
833 - Word 
complains about "persits" in this phrase "Filing MDE persists the data", and it 
complains repeatedly wherever this is used in this fashion, the consturct 
doesn't bother me, however, it may be something to change
844 - take should 
be takes
892 - I would prefer "An MDE" to "A MDE", but again stylistic
894 
- "It" is unspecified, not a clear reference to the multiple nouns in previous 
sentance, did you mean to refer to the MDE, Filings, or Clrek?
928 - 
"subscriber to the events publication." is a little awkward for me, perhaps 
"subscriber to the publication of events" works better
1263 - the steps look 
incomplete, should at least send the message back to the requester, not spelled 
out
1305 - again, message is assembled but not sent, should be clear about 
what happens
1313 - ditto
1364 - ditto
 














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