Thanks Chris. I have incorporated these into my WD12, except:
Line 217: how about "is based on a small but extensible data model"
Line 226: so should all other instances of the word 'web' be Capitalized? or UPPERCASE? My suggestion for here: "Web Service"
Ch. 2: Agree - I think the parenthetical comment can just be removed. Will investigate some better language to motivate the 'dessert' of the next chapters.
3.4: will work on language to fit this in, probably after existing text - something like: oBIX is so closely modeled on REST that it defines a REST binding in a companion document [ref].
I will be able to call in for a bit this morning.
Talk to you soon!
Craig
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I have only started combing through WD11 for nit-picky changes, but want to provide what I have so far before the meeting - and more if my other committee meeting ends early.
Line 207 "..lays the groundwork for building..."
Line 217 "small, but extensible, "
Line 226 "..existing Web service..." (all CAPS for other instances of "web")
Chapter 2: Last paragraph should provide better transition into next Chapter. Something like:
While Contracts provide a means to model your enterprise's concepts, oBIX 1.1 defines a standard Contract library to represent the most pedestrian, common concepts - e.g. Point, History, Alarm (see Sections 12, 13, and 14 respectively). Those readers new to oBIX may even prefer to eat dessert first and work their way backwards to the main course; i.e. read about the most interesting Contracts and reference to previous sections when concepts are not clear. In any case, Chapters 3-9 specify all of the cool stuff that make Contracts and oBIX servers/clients work.
Section 3.4: We should cross reference the REST bindings document here
Line 461: "This means you don't..."
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Hi TC-
I will be out of the office tomorrow. I will try to call in to the TC meeting, in case there are discussions about the WD11 doc. I will probably have to drop off by around 11:30 though. If you have any specific comments, you can always email me, or I will check the chat transcript for comments.
Thanks,
Craig
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