RE: [obix] Groups - Notes for oBIX PR01.pdf uploaded (UNCLASSIFIED)

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Caveats: FOUO

Editorial:

Line 2:  redundant "communicate"
Line 2:  Suggest "control systems (e.g. mechanical, electrical, security)...just something that indicates that "mechanical and electrical" aren't the definitive systems
Line 14"  need comma after (CoAP)
Line 25:  "added to [the] revised specification"

Otherwise short and sweet is good.  I think you covered the most substantial issues.  I would definitely go no more than one page.


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Subject: [obix] Groups - Notes for oBIX PR01.pdf uploaded

Submitter's message
Short Fuse: Please make comments or suggestions. I would like to submit the package of specifications on Friday. I can add anything you like, but if this verbiage grows much, it will be less effective. 
-- Toby Considine
Document Name: Notes for oBIX PR01.pdf <https://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/obix/document.php?document_id=49936> 

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Description
Today we voted all four specifications out for public review.

Part of such a such a submission is a description of what is being reviewed. Usually this is a quickly edited version for the summary purpose of the TC. That seems inadequate for this set of specifications.

This is a proposed description to accompany the Public Review, for comments and suggestions. It is a PDF with line numbers to make commenting easier. 
Download Latest Revision <https://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/obix/download.php/49936/latest/Notes%20for%20oBIX%20PR01.pdf>
Public Download Link <https://www.oasis-open.org/committees/document.php?document_id=49936&wg_abbrev=obix> 

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Submitter: Toby Considine
Group: OASIS Open Building Information Exchange (oBIX) TC
Folder: Meeting Notes
Date submitted: 2013-07-11 11:10:27



Classification: UNCLASSIFIED
Caveats: FOUO