Thanks Ken.
I couldn’t resist word-smithing a bit further. Hope it looks ok…
Peter
From: Ken Laskey [mailto:]
Sent: Friday, 10 August, 2012 06:35
To: Peter F Brown;
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808
Attached is a proposed revision of the conformance section. Most is wordsmithing the first subsection. I’ve saved it hiding the Track Changes so it is more readable. You
can view the specific changes as useful.
Ken
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Dr. Kenneth Laskey
MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934
7515 Colshire Drive fax: 703-983-1379
McLean VA 22102-7508
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On Behalf Of Peter F Brown
Sent: Wednesday, August 08, 2012 10:54 PM
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Subject: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808
Hi,
As promised, and slightly earlier than planned, here is the new draft, with all items of the punch list addressed.
The texts to be checked through in particular are:
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Kevin’s section 5.2 on security (I included his most recent edits from this Saturday);
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My new proposal regarding section 6, taking on Ken and Rex’s suggestions along with my earlier draft
Have at it….use line numbers of the PDF for any comments…
Regards,
Peter
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