Re: [soa-rm-ra] correct attachment [was: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits]

Hi Ken,
 
 I have responded to a few of your comments, not for the sake of arguin but just in case of presenting a different view.
 

 
- Michael
 

 

 
	 
 
 
	
 
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		From: Ken Laskey
 
	
 
		Sent: 08/13/12 04:15 AM
 
	
 
		To: 'Kevin Smith'
 
	
 
		Subject: [soa-rm-ra] correct attachment [was: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits]
 
	
 
	
 
		
 
			
 
				Won’t do much good if I just attach Kevin’s documents and have you guess at my suggested edits :)
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				Ken
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				
 
					
 
						From:  [mailto:] On Behalf Of Ken Laskey
 
						Sent: Saturday, August 11, 2012 2:44 PM
 
						To: 'Kevin Smith'
 
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				I attempted a careful read through and my final comments are attached.  There is some wordsmithing and a few things deleted where they are redundant or don’t flow. The major substantive change is an addition at the end of section 5.2.1.  During the call a few weeks ago, the discussion with Michael and Rex led to the paragraph about policy negotiation.  The phrasing in numerous places gave me an uncomfortable feeling of tight policy coupling; my added words are meant to address that.
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
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				From: Kevin Smith [mailto:]
 
				Sent: Saturday, August 04, 2012 11:50 AM
 
				To: Ken Laskey
 
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				Subject: Re: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				All - thank you for your comments.. I just did another significant round of edits.
 
				
 
				I'm headed to the beach on a family vacation for the week - looking forward to talking & getting feedback when I get back!
 
				
 
				-Kevin
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				
 
					On Tue, Jul 31, 2012 at 6:21 PM, Ken Laskey <> wrote:
 
				
 
					 
 
				
 
					 
 
				
 
					
 
						
 
							Kevin,
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							Attached is a markup of the security section.  I made edits to substitute terms defined and used (hopefully) consistently in the rest of the document, and made some pure wordsmithing suggestions where I found the text awkward.  I had more significant issues with the Identity Propagation section.  I captured these in the comment to the section 5.2.5.1 heading and then suggested some wording changes in the remainder of the section.
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							Happy processing.
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
							 
 
						
 
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							From:  [mailto:] On Behalf Of Kevin Smith
 
							Sent: Monday, July 30, 2012 4:13 PM
 
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									All,
 
									
 
									Attached are my edits to the security section, taking a careful look at Michael's comments on the security section and based on our discussion at the last meeting.
 
									
 
									Michael - take a look at this and let me know if this looks better..
 
									
 
									Thanks,
 
									
 
									Kevin
 
								
 
									 
 
								
 
									 
 
							
 
						
 
					
 
				
 
			
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
			
 
				 
 
		
 
	
 
 

 
	 
 

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