Re: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

All - thank you for your comments.. I just did another significant round of edits. 

I'm headed to the beach on a family vacation for the week - looking forward to talking & getting feedback when I get back!

-Kevin 

On Tue, Jul 31, 2012 at 6:21 PM, Ken Laskey <> wrote:

Kevin,

 

Attached is a markup of the security section.  I made edits to substitute terms defined and used (hopefully) consistently in the rest of the document, and made some pure wordsmithing suggestions where I found the text awkward.  I had more significant issues with the Identity Propagation section.  I captured these in the comment to the section 5.2.5.1 heading and then suggested some wording changes in the remainder of the section.

 

Happy processing.

 

Ken

 

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From:  [mailto:] On Behalf Of Kevin Smith

Sent: Monday, July 30, 2012 4:13 PM
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Subject: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

 

All,

Attached are my edits to the security section, taking a careful look at Michael's comments on the security section and based on our discussion at the last meeting.

Michael - take a look at this and let me know if this looks better.. 

Thanks,

Kevin 

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