Peter,
Just going through this and here are my thoughts:
- Changes before Figure 24 are as discussed.
- Rewording in section 4.2.2.1 seems to get to the point quicker.
- Removing Figure 25 and following text also seems to tighten it up.
- For two paragraphs at the end of section 4.2.2.1.1, I agree with deleting the last paragraph but the one before beginning "A common mechanism …" seems a reasonable grounding to people's expectation. I'd like to keep it but will not argue too strongly if opinions are otherwise.
Ken
---------------------------------------------------------------------------Dr. Kenneth LaskeyMITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-79347515 Colshire Drive fax: 703-983-1379McLean VA 22102-7508
On Oct 31, 2012, at 7:10 PM, Peter F Brown wrote:
Hi,
Before folding them into the main document, I’d like your review of where things stand now for section 4.2.1
In the attached extract, I have already taken as agreed a number of the edits we discussed explicitly today. The sidebar comments indicate where the changes are made. The one we didn’t address was the most radical, taking a scalpel through the Awareness Mediator diagram and some of the related text.
On reflection, I think Danny has it right, for a number of reasons – not least of all that it also addresses (by avoiding and deleting related wording!) the issue about whether only a consumer can discover a service, rather than also the other way around. Evidence would seem to point, increasingly, to mediators also providing services with consumer “descriptions”: we are not at the point – yet – of a consumer exposing an API (although most cell phones come very close) or providing a standardized description of “consuming capability” but we are not as far away as one might think (look up Vendor Relationship Management, Personal Data APIs, API economy, etc.).
Please take a look at the attached reworking – for which I have kept the changes tracked. If there is no pushback or alternative wording, I’ll include this in the latest Gold copy which I will distribute at the end of the week as agreed.
Best regards,
Peter
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