RE: [tgf] Business Case Flyer

Title: Comments on Business Case

It
works for me John

Well
done.

Many
thanks

Colin

 

 

From: John Borras [mailto:]

Sent: Thursday, 26 May 2011 10:13 p.m.

To: 'TGF TC List '; 'Carol Geyer'

Subject: RE: [tgf] Business Case Flyer

 

Thanks for your comments which I hope I have captured in the
attached.  So can we have one last review before we look to sign it off at
the next TC meeting.   

 

In particular does this final version really set out the
business case, is it convincing enough, does it answer some/all of the comments
we’ve received recently, etc.?

 

And for those of you that have Marketing departments can you get
your experts to cast an eye over it and let me have any suggestions for
improvement on the design, layout, format etc.

 

Final contributions please by Wednesday 8th
June.

 

John

 

From: John Borras [mailto:]

Sent: 23 May 2011 10:06

To: 'TGF TC List '

Subject: RE: [tgf] Comments on Business Case

 

Thanks to Colin and Nig for their comments.  Can I have any
other views please by close of play on Wednesday 25th May. 
I’d like to hear views on the general approach as well as detailed
textual changes.  

 

This will be an important part of our publicity and thus we need
to ensure we get the basic messages correctly focused, so please take a few
minutes to review it and share your opinions.

 

Regards

John Borras

 

Chair OASIS TGF Technical Committee

 

m. +(0)44 7976 157745

Skype:  gov3john

www.oasis-open.org/committees/tc_home.php?wg_abbrev=tgf

 

 

From: Greenaway Nigel
[mailto:] 

Sent: 20 May 2011 16:18

To: John Borras

Cc: TGF TC List 

Subject: [tgf] Comments on Business Case

 

Hi John,

        As discussed yesterday, and based on feedback from
Government practitioners, I have tried to reword parts of the business case. So
that everyone can see the changes and so that I can insert a few comments, I
have copied some of the text into a word document and used marked changes. I
follow this with the clear text that would result from adopting those changes
to facilitate understanding and reviews by others.

The basic premise that I have used in
deriving these comments is that we need to be less overtly critical of
e-Government projects/programmes as :-

1.      To dismiss all e-Government activity as
failing will upset many practitioners and make it personally impossible for
them to share and promote TGF with their bosses/customers

2.      There are successes in the field
– this is where we are picking up and sharing good practice and experience
from.

3.      Time has moved on and there are new
capabilities available due to technology changes, lessons having been learnt
and experience showing that good practice can be transferred from wherever it
originates into a large number of other situations

4.      A general maturation of Government ICT
and the policies required by government organisations is taking place (IMO).

I also have some comments further to
those in the marked up document.:-

1.      I don’t think we need to date to be
so prominent. I suggest a version and audience description (as discussed
yesterday) would be better. The audiences can be derived from the TGF audiences
and would enable us to empathise more closely with their respective viewpoints.

2.      Page 2 Title – “Why
TGF?” I suggest retitling this (taking K’s point that frameworks
rise a fall over time) as “Why a new framework?”

3.      Page 3 Title I suggest changing this to
“The Evolution of TGF from e-Government”

4.      Page 4 I suggest retitling simply as “The
TGF” and changing the some of the numbered points to flow a little
better(see marked up document)

And now the detail:-

       
       
<<20110520 - TGF Business Case (NG Comments).docx>> 

Regards

Nig

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