TGF v2 Review

Hi All, I have read the TGF v2 document and think it reads well.
I have a few minor comments (primarily items that have understandably occurred in the large editing session that was undertaken to produce the paper):- The references to ‘city’ or ‘smart city’ need to be removed (there are only around 3 or 4 of these)

The duplicated [B1] pattern (on pages 35/36) should be removed There is also some duplicated material in pattern [B8] (page 34) that should also be removed Some of the text in the diagrams in pattern [S1] are hard to read – one diagram has already fixed this by making the text white where there is a blue background).
Figures 3 and 4 in [B3} would also benefit from this treatment. There are some broken links e.g. under ‘Linkages’ in [B3] and [S3] [B5] states that it is a key input to [B9].
I suggest that should also be stated in the Linkages section of that pattern.
[BR1] refers to [BM8].
This should read [B10] Regards Nig Nig Greenaway Fujitsu Fellow FUJITSU Lovelace Road, Bracknell, Berkshire, RG12 8SN
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