Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded

Right!  I approve the updated abstract
 text on behalf of IBM.

Kind regards,

Matt
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 Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded

Hi Matt, do you know anybody
 at IBM who could reply in the affirmative to this? Hey, wait! Could  you
 confirm on behalf of IBM?



Best,

  --Richard
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 - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded



Hi Richard,

 Could you send out an email with altered text to the demo participants
 from Huawei, Fujitsu, Vnomic and IBM and if each company approves in an
 email reply we can send revised abstract to Jane.

 Kind regards,
 Matt
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 Richard" <

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 Paul C" <

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Date:          08/26/2013
 06:19 PM
Subject:          RE:
 [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26
 RP3.docx uploaded

 Paul, thanks for the kind words, and thanks for your initial improvement
 to put the value-proposition up front. It wouldn’t have gotten better
 if you hadn’t suggested that.


 I prefer not to wait a week, so I would like to do a fast email vote and
 switch to the “RP3” version to give to Jane for propagation.


 Matt, do you agree with the proposal to do an email vote?


 Interop SC members, are there any objections to replacing the paragraph
 we reviewed in today’s meeting with this version instead?

 Document Name :
OASIS
 TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx


 Best,
   --Richard
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Subject:  RE: [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract
 - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded


 Hi Richard (Hemingway),


 Many people never look at the long version of a description so this paragraph
 is important. That said; I think this new version,
RP3
,
 from you is far superior to the original version (and my own rather rushed
 attempts to improve it). It is clearly more readable, lays out the value-proposition
 up front, creates a clearer understanding of what the demo does, and has
 a lot more “punch.” In short, thank you, it’s great, and I do think
 it should be the version used by Jane.


 I don’t know if you and Matt prefer an email vote or to wait until next
 Monday (Labor Day????), but I hope very much that all participants approve
 RP3. It certainly has my vote.


 Thanks again,
 Paul
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 It is not the way we usually do business in the SC, but I would be willing
 to vote on the replacement text over email. Give Paul a chance to look
 at version RP3, then call a vote of the demo participants and see if nobody
 objects. We could give Jane an improved version by tomorrow,which does
 not hold up the promotion too much.

 Best,
   --Richard


 On Aug 26, 2013, at 12:26 PM, "Matt Rutkowski" <

>
 wrote:
 If we resolve on a new abstract (just the demo. participants need to all
 agree) we can vote on the update next week at the SC and ask Jane to update
 at that point.  Do not want promotion to be held up and we did approve
 the initial version today.

 It is just an abstract to draw awareness and attention.  Do no forget
 that Richard is still working on the larger (~ 500 word) full description
 to provide Jane shortly which can be infused with more details on value
 proposition, etc.

 Kind regards,
 Matt
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Date:          08/26/2013
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 Hi Paul,

 Yes, I edited your second upload. You will see the red-lines.

 I changed all instances of “This demo” to “The demo” because I believe
 it reads better, and the context is clear as soon as someone has read the
 first sentence. But if you really insist, change it back.

 Since the SC approved the draft today and Matt immediately sent it to Jane
 to get it posted ASAP, I think changes should be copied to the SC, so I
 don’t want to take this offline. We should be able to converge it quickly,
 before people get sick of the spam.

 Best,
  --Richard
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To:  Probst, Richard;

Subject:  RE: [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract
 - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded

 Hi Richard,

 Thanks for the iteration. FYI, there were actually a number of minor and
 some medium level tweaks, as well, to sentences, e.g. for a minor one,
 don’t call the demo “the OASIS demo,” but rather “This OASIS demo,”
 unless you never think we’ll have another OASIS demo. :-)

 More seriously, please bear with me, as I will have to take a look later
 today. Could you please confirm (offline if you want) that you based this
 on my second upload (revision #2) at
https://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/tosca-interop/download.php/50444/OASIS%20TOSCA%20Interop%20Demo%20-%20Abstract%20-%202013-08-26%20PL2.docx
?

 If anybody wants Richard and me to take this often line, just let us know,
 of course.

 Thanks,
 Paul
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 - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded

 Submitter's message
 Paul, if we want to put the value proposition first, we can do that. However,
 I think that this will require a little more editing than simply changing
 the order of sentences, so I am not comfortable with this revision. In
 the spirit of rapid iteration, here is a revision to your revision.

 Best,
 --Richard

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Mr. Richard Probst

Document Name :
OASIS
 TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx



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 Submitter : Mr. Richard Probst
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