Surprise! comments on 3.0.1...

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Section 11.1.6.3 a.5 
and b.5 - use an acronym "IAW" - I'm not sure if this is a well-known acronym, 
but I've not seen it before. At the same time, shouldn't we simply delete a.5 
and b.5 in that they are implied by a.3 and b.3? If we do keep them, we should 
change the references from a.2 and b.2 to a.3 and b.3.

 

Section 11.2.2.2 - 
lose the page break after.

 

Section 11.2.2.4 - 
"Used to get a list of relationship assertions that are useful for display..." 
should be "...that is useful...".

 

Section 11.2.8.4 - 
lose the page break after.

 

Section 11.2.10.4 - 
lose page break after.

 

Section 11.2.10.5 - 
possibly lose page break after

 

Section 11.3 opening 
para, last sentence - lose the hyphen after "transport-"

 

Section 11.3.1.2 
opening sentence: "principle" should be "principal".

 

Section 11.3.1.1 and 
11.3.2.1 have footnotes 38 and 39 which point to different references for the 
same thing (SSL3.0) - surely these should both refer to the same place, but 
which one? I suggest using the reference in footnote 39.

 

Section 11.3.2.2 
opening sentence: "principle" should be "principal".

 

Section 11.3.5.1 
last sentence starts "The ftp transport tModel..." should be "The FTP Transport 
tModel...".

 

Section 11.4.7.3 
remove colon at end of layout, just before section 
11.4.7.3.1

 

Section 11.4.7.3.1 
lose page break after

 

 

 

Tony Rogers

Computer Associates