Re: [xacml] Changes required to submitted document - XACML TC - Request for Second Public Review

Hi Eric,

  Unfortunately that's not what was submitted; Hal's request dated 22 April is incorporated below.

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	From: 	Harold Lockhart <>

	Subject: 	XACML TC - Request for Second Public Review

	Date: 	April 22, 2010 10:40:56 AM EDT

	To: 	Tc-Admin (E-mail) <>

	Cc: 	Bill Parducci (E-mail) <>, Tolbert, John W <>

At the April 8 meeting of the XACML TC, the TC voted to request a second public review of 15 days for XACML Intellectual Property Control  (IPC) profile Version 1.0 Committee draft 2.

The document contains a designated cross-reference as defined in TC Process section 2.19. It is understood that this may delay the date the spec reaches approved status.

The designated cross-reference is:

eXtensible Access Control Markup Language (XACML) Version 3.0 Committee Draft 03
http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37088/xacml-3.0-core-spec-cd-03-en.zip
It is expected to become an OASIS Standard by December 31, 2010.

The minutes of the meeting are here:

http://lists.oasis-open.org/archives/xacml/201004/msg00012.html

The document is here:

http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37055/xacml-3.0-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.doc

http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37077/xacml-3%200-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.pdf

http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37054/xacml-3.0-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.htm

The announcement of the first public review is here:

http://lists.oasis-open.org/archives/tc-announce/200910/msg00013.html

The log of changes made since the first public review is here:

http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/36727/IPC%20change%20log.doc

Hal Lockhart
Bill Pardicci

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On Apr 27, 2010, at 9:29 PM, Erik Rissanen wrote:

Kim,

I don't know what went wrong, but you have been reviewing the wrong
version. It is CD-03 which has been (or should have been) submitted to
public review and I believe these issues (or at least most of them)
have been already fixed.

Best regards,

Erik

On 2010-04-27 15:10, Kim Goolsby wrote:

  

  
http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/TCADMIN-138

  

  

  http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37055/xacml-3.0-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.doc 

  http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37077/xacml-3%200-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.pdf 

  http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/37054/xacml-3.0-ipc-v1-spec-cd-02-en.htm 
  

  

  
As
I check this spec for QC, I've noted the following changes that need to
be made:

  

  
    
The
specification title, 'profile' should be initial cap.

      

      

    
The
stage should be initial cap.

      

      

    
The
HTML as created out of Word cannot be uploaded by itself; any images or
other external resources will be lost. When saving as HTML Word creates
both an html file and a folder that contains these resources. The
resulting set must be uploaded as a zip into Kavi in order to be
complete. 

      

      

    
This
Version link has changed directories from the original CD01 upload. The
directory location must remain the same. In addition, pdf and html
files must be listed. Please designate one file as 'Authoritative'.

      

      

    
Previous
version: the link is not in the proper location of the CD01 files. In
addition, pdf and html files must be listed.

 

    
The
Latest Version URIs are incorrect and do not correspond to the CD01
files. 

      

      

    
Related
work: this should be hypertext linked to the actual specification
referenced.

      

      

    
Status
links, which were correct in CD01, are once again broken. 

      

      

    
Notices,
last paragraph, please remove bracketed section, which reads ' [insert
specific trademarked names and abbreviations here] & need to link
OASIS to its homepage]'.

      

      

    
OASIS
references, which were correct in CD01, are improperly formatted. 

      

      

    
Please
either remove extraneous links to XACMLIntro or provide full citation
information for each.

  
  

  

  

  

  
I'm
happy to answer any questions you might have about these changes.

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  

  
Regards,

  
Kim

  

  

  

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