Re: [entity-resolution] draft blurb for the vote [was: minutes frommeeting 20050823]

Lauren Wood wrote:

> I'll incorporate this into the next version. Can people have any other 
> changes to me by Monday?

I was thinking about this sentence more:

"An external identifier that is addressed with the ftp: protocol, for 
example, is not accessible to a tool that does not support that protocol. "

and I think that "identifier" can't be "addressed" in this context. 
Perhaps the following formulation is better:

"An external identifier is addressing resource available with the FTP 
protocol, for example, and this resource is not accessible to a tool 
that does not support that protocol. "

or alternatively:

"An external identifier that uses the ftp: scheme in URL address, for 
example, is not accessible to a tool that does not support that protocol. "

The latter is may be more close to initial intention.

But I don't hold strong position on this as I'm for sure the least 
capable English speaker on TC.

Cheers,

			Jirka

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