Re: [pbd-se] Groups - pbd-se-v1 0-wd04.docx uploaded

Hi John:

Many thanks for your excellent catches, comments and edits. A How To Use this Document is a very good suggestion. 

Sincerely,

Dawn.

On Tue, Jun 3, 2014 at 11:07 AM, John.Annapolis Verizon <> wrote:

Dawn,

I've reviewed the Rev 4 document, and the work is really impressive.  Attached is a copy with my comments and suggested edits in tracking mode.

One additional comment: I would recommend that we consider including a "How to Use this Document" section or something similar (to complement Section 1.4, "Outline of the Specification) because of the complexity of the material and at times overlapping and cross-referenced material across sections.

John Sabo

On Jun 2, 2014, at 2:19 PM, Dawn Jutla wrote:

        Submitter's message

        Dear TC Members: Revision 4 is for consideration to adopt as our base  Committee Specification Draft after a further round of discussion/ input/recommendations/suggested edits from TC members. Please can you read it through and provide your feedback and input. With thanks, Dawn
        

-- Dr. Dawn Jutla
        
    

    
        Document Name: pbd-se-v1 0-wd04.docx

        
        Description

        PbD-SE Working Document        

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        Submitter: Dr. Dawn Jutla

                Group: OASIS Privacy by Design Documentation for Software Engineers (PbD-SE) TC

        Folder: Documents

        Date submitted: 2014-06-02 11:19:15