Fred – I don’t know what documents Dawn is talking about. Can you send out the links?
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On Behalf Of Fred Carter
Sent: Wednesday, June 18, 2014 3:38 PM
To: 'Dawn Jutla'; ''
Cc: Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: [pbd-se] PbD spec - section 2 revisions
Hi Dawn,
I added section 2 (with all members’ comments) to your WD R04 and re-uploaded
Unfortunately, the revisions do not survive cutting-and-pasting.
Among the general changes:
·
Strengthened the 7 principles’ descriptions/requirements, but softened the sub-principles’ requirements
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Trimmed redundant PbD text, re-organized headings and sub-headings accordingly
·
Made terms more precise and consistent terms, e.g. PbD principles, users/data subjects, personal data, compliance.
They are attached for interested TC members.
Thx, Fred
From: Fred Carter
Sent: Tuesday, June 17, 2014 10:15 AM
To: 'Dawn Jutla'
Cc: ; Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: RE: pbd spec
Dawn,
Yes I will follow your lead and prepare Section 2 and 4.1 in similar manner for tomorrow’s TC call.
Thx, Fred
From: Dawn Jutla [mailto:]
Sent: Monday, June 16, 2014 8:19 PM
To: Fred Carter
Cc: ; Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: Re: pbd spec v1r1 - Fred's revisions
Hi everyone:
In order for us to compose a Master document once more that we may vote on for a CSD, this is a heads up that I am incorporating all 7 sets of recent TC edits section by section (except for Section 2). For example in section 1, I have accepted
most of the TC edits with just a few questions. I am listing a few questions at the end of each section when I have not addressed an edit, and/or reasons for rejecting them which the TC can discuss. I will upload the sections of the document to Kavi by tomorrow
afternoon. As well as a complete document.
Fred: will you be doing something similar for section 2 and the sub-principles of Table 4.1 with the TC edits or suggestions?
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Looking forward to a long discussion on Wednesday.
Best,
Dawn.
On Mon, Jun 16, 2014 at 4:38 PM, Fred Carter <> wrote:
Attached are some additional suggested edits to section 2 and 4, including:
1.
Revision to text of introduction and section 1.5 (definition of personal data)
2.
Minor tweaks to wording of section 2 and 4
3.
Added new Section 6: Conformance
These suggested edits will be included in the master chart.
Thx, Fred
