Proofing of section 3 (intro and 3.1)

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Lines 233-234: (switch sentence order)

The noun “service” is defined
in dictionaries as “The performance of work (a function) by one for
another.”  SOA is a way to organize the world around this key
concept of service.

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A service oriented architecture
represents a uniform means to offer, discover and interact with capabilities to
produce desired effects consistent with measurable preconditions and
expectations. This section introduces the main concepts within this paradigm.  A detailed discussion of the
concepts and their relationships are in the sections that follow.

 

Lines 231-235

A key concept of SOA is that of service. In general, entities (people and
organizations) create capabilities to solve or support a solution for the
problems they face in the course of their business. SOA organizes the world
around this key concept of service. The noun “service” is defined
in dictionaries as “The performance of work (a function) by one for
another.”  However, service, as the term is typically conceived, also
rolls in the following related ideas: 

 

Line 240-241: strike and replace with lines 249-251

 

Line 245:

Change:  “address a
need” to “address some need”

 

Line 247-248:

Therefore, this
concept focuses the necessary interfaces and behavior to support the
interaction. Recall
also that interaction may, and often will, cross ownership boundaries.  SOA
identifies necessary aspects of interactions involving multiple ownership
domains.  However, it does not directly embody concepts relating to
ownership.  

 

Line 252-256:

Delete as redundant of
lines 231 – 251.

 

Line 257:

In order to accept an offer of service, it is necessary to know that it
exists, what is accomplished if the service 

 

Line 259-260: (strike “to be permitted access”
from end of sentence)

When given an explicit searchable form, this
information allows, for example, prospective consumers to decide if the service
is suitable for their current needs and establishes whether a consumer satisfies any
requirements of the service provider. 

 

Line 272-274:

Replace “Although services are accessed in order to achieve
particular desired effects, this is effected by exchanging information between service
providers and consumers.” With “Service
providers and consumers exchange information to achieve particular desired
effects.” 

 

 

Line 277:

…possibility of and mechanisms by which

 

Line 278:

…For example, registries
or repositories of service descriptions…

 

Lines 281-281:

Inserted within lines
247-248

 

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