RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

Make it so.

 

 

From: Peter F Brown [mailto:] 
Sent: Saturday, August 11, 2012 3:53 PM
To: Ken Laskey
Cc: 
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

 

Sir, your last word is granted…. ;-)

Shall I cut this new draft in to the Gold Copy?

Peter

 

From: Ken Laskey [mailto:] 
Sent: Saturday, 11 August, 2012 11:48
To: Peter F Brown
Cc: 
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

 

Superb!

 

But to get the last word in, change “a ‘Architectural Implications’ section” to “an ‘Architectural Implications’ section”.

 

Ken

 

From: Peter F Brown [mailto:] 
Sent: Friday, August 10, 2012 3:03 PM
To: Ken Laskey
Cc: 
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

 

Thanks Ken.

I couldn’t resist word-smithing a bit further. Hope it looks ok…

Peter

 

From: Ken Laskey [mailto:] 
Sent: Friday, 10 August, 2012 06:35
To: Peter F Brown; 
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

 

Attached is a proposed revision of the conformance section.  Most is wordsmithing the first subsection.  I’ve saved it hiding the Track Changes so it is more readable.  You can view the specific changes as useful.

 

Ken

 

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From:  [mailto:] On Behalf Of Peter F Brown
Sent: Wednesday, August 08, 2012 10:54 PM
To: 
Subject: [soa-rm-ra] New draft, WD09-20120808

 

Hi,

As promised, and slightly earlier than planned, here is the new draft, with all items of the punch list addressed.

 

The texts to be checked through in particular are:

-          Kevin’s section 5.2 on security (I included his most recent edits from this Saturday);

-          My new proposal regarding section 6, taking on Ken and Rex’s suggestions along with my earlier draft

 

Have at it….use line numbers of the PDF for any comments…

 

Regards,

Peter

 

 

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