RE: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

Ken,

The document you attached was Kevin’s 4th August edits – there were no additional edits or comments.

 

Aside this, there were indeed a number of editing anomalies, which have now been corrected in the latest draft. All other edits agreed at the last meeting have
 also been included.

 

I will send this to you shortly and thus pass on the Gold Copy token – up to you then to see to the edits you refer to Kevin’s section 5.2.1…

 

Cheers,

Peter

 

From:  [mailto:]
On Behalf Of Ken Laskey

Sent: Saturday, 11 August, 2012 11:44

To: 'Kevin Smith'

Cc: 

Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

 

I attempted a careful read through and my final comments are attached.  There is some wordsmithing and a few things deleted
 where they are redundant or don’t flow. The major substantive change is an addition at the end of section 5.2.1.  During the call a few weeks ago, the discussion with Michael and Rex led to the paragraph about policy negotiation.  The phrasing in numerous
 places gave me an uncomfortable feeling of tight policy coupling; my added words are meant to address that.

 

Ken

 

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From: Kevin Smith
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Sent: Saturday, August 04, 2012 11:50 AM

To: Ken Laskey

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Subject: Re: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

 

All - thank you for your comments.. I just did another significant round of edits.

I'm headed to the beach on a family vacation for the week - looking forward to talking & getting feedback when I get back!

-Kevin 

On Tue, Jul 31, 2012 at 6:21 PM, Ken Laskey <> wrote:

Kevin,

 

Attached is a markup of the security section.  I made edits to substitute terms defined and used (hopefully) consistently in the rest of the document, and made some
 pure wordsmithing suggestions where I found the text awkward.  I had more significant issues with the Identity Propagation section.  I captured these in the comment to the section 5.2.5.1 heading and then suggested some wording changes in the remainder of
 the section.

 

Happy processing.

 

Ken

 

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703-983-1379

McLean VA 22102-7508

 

From:
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On Behalf Of Kevin Smith

Sent: Monday, July 30, 2012 4:13 PM

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Subject: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits

 

All,

Attached are my edits to the security section, taking a careful look at Michael's comments on the security section and based on our discussion at the last meeting.

Michael - take a look at this and let me know if this looks better.. 

Thanks,

Kevin